for dVerse
Firelight reveals
Dusty straw; spinning wheel
For the king's iornclad deal
Gold or death's seal
Little wonder she heeded
The voice that greeted
An unsual sight
The girl and spirte
Her paranormal knight
Escaping the blight
Morning light shines cold
Over the shimmering gold
Oh! I LOVE this pithy retelling! So much fun rhyme in here. This staccato style suits you well. Just wonderful. This truly shimmers.
ReplyDeleteWhat a great shimmering retelling of the story of Rumpelstiltskin! :)
ReplyDeleteThis is one of my favorite fairy tales and you did such a great job of incorporating the Quadrille prompt with the NaPoWriMo. And wonderful rhyme and flow. Thanks for joining us.
ReplyDeleteThe rhythm, like a spinning wheel. Super take on the old fairy tale and on the prompt. I really enjoyed this.
ReplyDeleteI always loved that story when I was a kid. I'll have to revisit it to jump start my memory of just how it went. I love your fun rhyming quadrille.
ReplyDeleteClever take on a favorite tale...great time with rhyme!
ReplyDeletelove the rhyme and rhythm, makes me want to sing the fairytale
ReplyDeleteI love this! I have posted my own poetic retelling of some of Hans Christian Andersen's fairy tales and have just started on Grimm.
ReplyDeleteNo fractured fairy tale this.....love the retelling with the key word! Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteIt's fractured because I'm interpreting "Escaping the blight" as Rumpelstiltskin and the miller's daughter running away together. It doesn't quite come across in 44 words though.
DeleteNice retelling. :-)
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I love all the rhyme throughout. Very fun to read aloud.
ReplyDeleteA fun read. Rumpelstiltskin is one of my favorite fairytales. Well done. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat rhyme and rhythm in your retelling of a classic tale! It's a bit tricky to pull off in just 44 words, but you aced it!
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