When the clear air bites
Cold and colder
I embark in gloves and scarfs
Green leaves flush in fright
Red and redder
Crunching underfoot
The frosty chill invites
Chocolate and chocolate
Stirred steaming and sipped
Winter brings night —
Early and earlier
My window darkens
Written for dVerse.
Who is this? Do I know you, or your name? Brilliant voice, pace, sounds n images. The entire was great but final stanza was pure jazz. So smooth. Very good. Very good. I love alliteration, repetition, assonance , and more tools that some are just born with and speak naturally. Too bad sometimes we can’t hear poets speak their lines. Look forward to more.
ReplyDeleteGreat evocation of the changing seasons, very sensory.
ReplyDeleteYou've reminded me of what I love about winter, the gloves and scarves,
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'Winter brings night —
Early and earlier'.
I love the stark contrast of the colour of the leaves and the darkened window.
the green leaves that got redder and redder and the slow increment of mood and pace, reminding the reader the season will soon change,
ReplyDeleteI like how you described winter bringing night earlier and earlier.
ReplyDeleteFantastic use of repetition! The "chocolate and chocolate" part was fun.
ReplyDeleteIt's the chocolate that keeps us moving (and plenty of coffee)
ReplyDeleteEarly and Earlier my window darkens
ReplyDeleteDaylight hours dwindle as winter approaches. Out my window all I
see is darkness.
Beautiful ending on this!
ReplyDeleteToo early for winter here but looking forward to those hot chocolates.
ReplyDeleteGorgeous closing on this one!!❤️
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