Stones
reflected in the
moat.
Ancient stories blurred
by water
soft and deep.
Old tales
forgotten, yet
whispered
through the quiet
ages.
Calling out, but
leaving
something unseen.
So let the
harper play
Singing of
those long lost
Days. Shadows
dance upon
the stones.
Past heroes come.
Forgotten tales
renew
memories rise
from the dust.
Unseen yet remembered.
The castle is a great manifestation..
ReplyDeletewith just a bit of tweaking this would fit the Pleiades form perfect for each stanza...you have the S's throughout, so if you changed the title to an S word and reformed with S to start each line, it would work...the story within is good....its got a bit of a ballady sound to it...
ReplyDeleteGroovy piece. Love- "Ancient stories blurred / by water soft and deep."
ReplyDeleteLove the mystery within this piece and your topic choice, too.
ReplyDeleteThere are old tales forgotten in the stones ~ I suggest you revise the title and lines to start with the same first letter of the title ~ You got rhythm here ~
ReplyDeleteHave seen castles in Ireland and Wales. I love the history in the stones. Where our buildings in the U.S. go back only two or three hundred years, castles go back over a thousand. Oh, the stories the stones could tell! Lovely poem, thanks for taking me back with your imagery.
ReplyDeletethis was really nice. I liked everything about it.
ReplyDeletenice lines that need a little bit of twisting to suit the prompt...
ReplyDeleteshadows dance on the stones is an amazing line.
ReplyDeletean amazing place. but I do agree with Mr. Brian, you can do it.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful creation.
ReplyDeleteGreat opening lines. I notices it wasn't the Pleiades form, thought maybe you meant to like to a different prompt, but I'm glad I got to read it at any rate.
ReplyDeleteThe stones do speak. I have heard them.
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